Critic #1: <Henry>
Overall, he said the shades of colors conveyed the idea of depth well. The background texture looks weird. He suggested to maybe just follow the background color because the visual language model did not use so much textures. Also, for both versions, the slide part was not very smooth. For the first version, the colors of logo and picture are not quite match. For the second one, the font is not as clean as the font from the visual language model.
​According to his feedback, I firstly modified the outline of the slide to make it smoother. And I changed the texture background to a single color.
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Critic #2: <Isabelle>
For the first one, the color of the logo and image is not matching. Maybe change the color of logo to be the same green, or the orange as the color model. Change the image to orange may match better with the green logo. For the second one, she said maybe use a hint of green to highlight like the logo at the bottom of the color language.
She suggested to follow the bottom right element in the color model, that to make the text green to highlight the text content. I tried to use green color for all text, but then the text looks hard to read, so I used green to highlight the title, and used the dark grey for the rest of the text.
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Critic #3: <Jorge>
Overall they look great. Two suggestions are that change the font to match better with the visual language model later on, and the resolution of the background is bad. Maybe fix this by use only background color or by finding higher resolution textures.
He suggested to find a better font that will match the visual language model better. I chose to use the Arial Narrow, since it is more similar with the font used in my visual language model. I also changed the background color as the gray in the color model.
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Critic #1: <Mayowa>
She said the first version was good. She wondered why I didn’t use green color from the color model because green is more predominant. She suggested to add some green color to the graph. Also, the graph I made had a hint of 3D but the language model is more flat. For the second version, she liked the new font and the green color of the title. She suggest to resize both the paragraph and picture, so they can match better with the visual language model. She also suggested that maybe I can add some green to the picture to match the paragraph.
According to her feedback, I redid the picture so that it is more flat than 3D. I also played around with the color so the picture includes more colors from the color model. I resized both the picture and paragraph, so they could match better with the visual language model.
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Critic #2: <Yicheng>
Overall, although there is a bit green in the model but there was still very few colors. The paragraph is simple in visual language model because there are many colors. If use the same simple paragraph and picture but only with 2 or 3 colors, it looks a little boring instead of popping up.
Since the color scheme was simple in the previous versions, the picture looks dry. I changed the color of the picture so it could be more colorful and eye catchy.
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Appearance Elements & Critiques
Critic #3: <Diana>
She said the pictures looks good, but it is more detailed compared to the visual language model. Maybe try to make more flat but at the same time try to conserve a little depth so it will match better.
I changed the picture as a whole to make it more flat and abstract, while kept the different lightness of colors in order to show a little depth.
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This emulation shows:
This infographic is about Playground. This appearance could give audience a sense of fun and active childhood.
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How this element exploits the visual potential of appearance:
By giving audience a sense of fun and active, this display infers that the application Playground could let children have fun as playing at a playground.
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How this element emulates the models:
(1) To emulate my color model, I used the color from my model infographic. I used the main color from the color model, which are bright green and orange to make my appearance display.
(2) To emulate my visual language model, I made the graphic to be flat, without any rotating. I also made it very simplified with minimum details in order to follow the visual language model.
(3) There were no text in this display, so it does not emulate my typography model.
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